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The Angel Cried Blood by ~mmp123:iconmmp123:



The Angel Cried Blood

Permanent ink on my mind,
Written as a memorial of,
Of an angel,
Angel crying blood…

In the silent yet screaming night,
I got out to find my life.
When I saw a glittering figure,
Standing solely in the midst of crowd.
Here and there the people went,
But the angel stood like a frozen figurine.

Her face a little pearl of white,
Was wrapped in excruciating pain and torment.
Here ocean like eyes narrowed, glaring
At her dress, ghostly glowing.

Then,
Then two drops fell.
One form the heaven,
And one from her eyes.
Which I was jolted to see,
Was a scarlet droplet of blood.
The rain gained strength
And awashed the angels’ mystique beauty,
As her wings shattered,
Into thousands of wilted feathers.
And her knees hit the ground,
Still socking as she cried.

As I stood there dazed
I knew
That a drop form above,
Could never,
Lave away the pain within
When the angel cried blood.

By Iqra Imtiaz
Mmp123.deviantart.com
©2009 ~mmp123
:iconmmp123:

Author's Comments

yeah, i wrote this when i was feeling quite sad, melancholic one night..^^;
i think it doesn't have a plot really, no?
but my friends really found it quite captivating..maybe they're as gory minded as me ;P

this is my first poetry ever, so read it positively..
though i would really appreciate showers of critiques as well please! :D

i was kinda inspired by ani-chan's picture with a girl weeping blood..so cool!!:D
so this poem will be dedicated to :iconakiko-sama: as token of my friendship:blush: :hug:

~i-chan

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:icontursiops33:
The idea is very good, though because of the many typing mistake you cannot read this straight, you have to pause and think about what the word was initially meant to be.
I also think that the ideas are kind of random, it looks like it's messy in your head, if you see what I mean :P

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Poems in english at: [link]
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We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconmmp123:
ohh, thankyou for such a great comment, ill try to improve on those areas, tursi-sama!:D
and please, can you point out some mistakes you mentioned?:please:

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:butterflytwo::dygel:you think you know me...but im changing all the time:dygel::butterflytwo:
:icontursiops33:
Here they are:

Written as a memorial of,
Of an angel, (two times of)

Here ocean like eyes narrowed (her not here)

One form the heaven, (from not form)

That a drop form above, (from not form)

Hope it helps :D

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Poems in english at: [link]
Poèmes en français [link]
Dolphins at: [link]

We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconakiko-sama:
*le gasp*

the poem....

s-s-s-s-sooooo beautiful!!!
I really love it! And I totaly pictured everything in my head as I read this poem!

realy beautiful!!
and thank you soo much I-chan ;_____;
you're just TOOOOOO kind to mee!! ;_____;

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When you cease to dream, you cease to live!
:iconmmp123:
oh wow! you know i never noticed!:wow:
thankyou again tursi-sama!! you've got a great eye for words!;P
:hug:

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:butterflytwo::dygel:you think you know me...but im changing all the time:dygel::butterflytwo:
:icontursiops33:
np my pleasure!

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Poems in english at: [link]
Poèmes en français [link]
Dolphins at: [link]

We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing each other.
:iconmmp123:
really, you think so?^^;
im soo glad you like it:glomp:

hehe, thankyou so much!:heart:

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:butterflytwo::dygel:you think you know me...but im changing all the time:dygel::butterflytwo:
:iconshadowaeroku:
Lovely :) seems very sensitive

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Ukelele no gooood...
:iconmmp123:
aww, thanjou!!:glomp:

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:butterflytwo::dygel:you think you know me...but im changing all the time:dygel::butterflytwo:

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